Writing Projects
The Mosaic of You & The Message of Us
Mini-Lesson (Revised) Link:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VXQcSXnAmTFdHz78a2vhvxh0rcg0o_mu9QTFLHQ_wPA/edit?usp=sharing
Assessment of Writing
Three Stage Rubric
Noah E
Cole D
Assessment of Writing
SE2R Feedback
Written Narrative Feedback: Noah E
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Summarize: Had a meaningful song that connected to your video as well as your photos, these connections help the viewer see what kind of person you are.
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Explain: The photos were clearly connected to the song. The text you have provided helps the viewer better understand what they are seeing and helps them get to know you better. The placement of the text on some pictures could be better placed as sometimes images were obstructed cutting out some one’s face from the picture. The video could use a conclusion that way we know the video has ended instead of just ending wit your last image. Otherwise the video is very well done. It shows a clear image of who you are.
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Redirect: Try revising your video by adding a conclusion, as well as seeing if you could find a better placement for the text to give it a more professional look.
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Resubmit: Try adding some of these finishing ideas to your video to make it your final draft.
Written Narrative Feedback: Cole D
Summarize: You used a song that connected to your life. Along with pictures that helped give some meaning to who you are.
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Explain: visual design, transitions. You clearly showed in your video your love for farming, your pets, as well as a favorite hobby like skiing. You could try to show a picture with a clearer image of you. That way the viewer will have a better connection to you being it is your video. As well as trying to add an introduction and a conclusion to help add to the story
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Redirect: try going back to your video and see if you could add a beginning and a conclusion to help the video flow a little better. Using text can help to get the point across you are trying to make to your viewer. Transitions and detailed visual design can help to make the video look more professional.
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Resubmit: Try revising your video considering some of these possibilities.